Friday, November 16, 2007




















Commercial another one.


Ryan: Hello now you know my partner and i.

Tim: But if you don’t my name is tim and his is ryan.

Ryan: yes now that we have greetings aside we would like to inform you of our special promotional deal.

Tim: Of course I’m sure you remember that last time we spoke to you we were asking three easy payments of only 999.99. to go to wonderland

Ryan: Its true we only asked for 999.99 viewers that failed to watch us last time.

Tim: yes well now we are only asking for 888.88 its an amazing deal to go to an amazing place.

Ryan: well as much as we would like to keep our prices as low as this but we cant. This is only a limited time offer.

Tim: this spectacular offer is only good for the next ten minutes so call now to get your password to give the supplier of tickets.

Ryan: the number is 555-5555. remember call within the next ten minutes or else you wont be able to get this great offer.

Tim: until the next time see you around in the wonderful land of wonderland.

8 comments:

Plowboys said...

That was a great post. On your script, you ould have worked on capitalization, but other than that it was a great post.

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it sounds really good but you guys should practice a little more or something so it will flow alot better, but other than that i like it.

adre said...

how come alice can go for free but we have to pay?

Pigs_on_the_wing said...

hey guys your post wasn't bad but it wasnt the best. i think we all could tell you read your sricpt as you went. but don't give up

Unknown said...

Ryan's voice was monotone. Also, you guys didn't seem to care. It was just listening to you guys read a script. I could not picture what you guys were saying in my mind because there was no passion for your podcast. The script is okay but you really need to act, even if you're not being seen. You can act with just your voice.

Hay Hay said...

Tim and Ryan your post is pretty good. On your script you need to work on your grammar and capalization. Other than that great job.

Oprah changed my life ! ! ! said...

Great job. I loved your idea for the contents of your podcast. Keep up the good work.

Mr. Neuburger said...

I think the comments you have pretty well describe my thoughts exactly. You just need to sell me on the "special" deal.